haiku 5-7-5
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Topic: haiku 5-7-5
Posted By: grafin
Subject: haiku 5-7-5
Date Posted: 09.Jun.2008 at 20:25
nit za ustvarjanje haikujev.. originalno japonskih trovrsticnih besedilc, ki ujamejo trenutek.. haiku ima precej oblik.. na tej niti se gremo samo eno, bolj klasicno formo: 1 vrstica ima 5 zlogov 2 vrstica 7 in 3 vrstica spet 5 zlogov. ni sploh nujno, da se rima..
to je moj drugi haiku v lajfu:
na rdeckast vecer,
zogobrc ustvarja nemir,
sama grem na pir.
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Posted By: Buco
Date Posted: 09.Jun.2008 at 20:35
drek je v skretu smrdi po crkovini - potegnem vodo.
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Posted By: Banshee
Date Posted: 09.Jun.2008 at 20:38
Paranoid zgaga, čikfajt je bedarija, haiku pa zmaga.
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Posted By: Ruda
Date Posted: 09.Jun.2008 at 20:46
hajkuji so bolj brezvezna iznajdba kot praskalo
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Posted By: Guests
Date Posted: 09.Jun.2008 at 21:18
Tristo kosmatih
morje hik hik morje hik
pejmo na morje
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Posted By: Buco
Date Posted: 09.Jun.2008 at 21:19
fabo je peder rudl nima rok pa nog buco to sem jaz.
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Posted By: Hopsy
Date Posted: 09.Jun.2008 at 22:06
nič pametnega mi ne pade na pamet buco je gay ja
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Posted By: Nordy Nuš
Date Posted: 10.Jun.2008 at 00:49
pozna je ura ko pijem vino rdeče postla me čaka
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Posted By: Madafaka
Date Posted: 10.Jun.2008 at 00:56
grafin wrote:
1 vrstica ima 5 zlogov 2 vrstica 7 in 3 vrstica spet 5 zlogov. ni sploh nujno, da se rima..
to je moj drugi haiku v lajfu:
na rdeckast vecer, zogobrc ustvarja nemir, sama grem na pir.
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Ne bi rad biu preveč pametn, sam men se zdi da je tale tvoj haiku bl 6-8-5 varianta, ali pač? 
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Posted By: khors
Date Posted: 10.Jun.2008 at 09:09
žejen pir bi piu, žejen žejen žejen sm, žejn še vedno
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Posted By: grafin
Date Posted: 10.Jun.2008 at 10:49
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delno mas prav.. :)
skupaj nama bo uspelo.. :)
nar-dec-kast-ve-cer (5)
zo-go-brc-us-tva-rja-ne-mir (8)
sa-ma-grem-na-pir (5)
ajde spreminjam..
na rdeckast vecer, zogobrc dviga nemir, sama grem na pir.
:)
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Posted By: PiWi
Date Posted: 10.Jun.2008 at 11:47
toplo je in tko vse zeleno she prevech me ni zaznat sploh
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Posted By: Mrtupevc
Date Posted: 10.Jun.2008 at 11:56
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singonij je lep
splezal skoraj do stropa
posekal ga - konc
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Posted By: Person-man
Date Posted: 10.Jun.2008 at 12:08
moj anus lebdi kokain zelo diši fukam babice
Aja, če si naredim malo reklame. V topicu moji stripi sem uploadal en strip, katerega druga polovica je celotna v haikujih. Imenuje se Življenjski ciklus faznbriferja ^^
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Posted By: Buco
Date Posted: 10.Jun.2008 at 15:00
lalalalala lalalalalalala lalalalala
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Posted By: Guests
Date Posted: 10.Jun.2008 at 17:06
Buco wrote:
lalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalala
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ti si pa ne izviren, kr si vse zloge dal iste!
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Posted By: Buco
Date Posted: 10.Jun.2008 at 17:37
ne pa ne, ti si tle si neki pametn raj mi dej en per.
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Posted By: grafin
Date Posted: 10.Jun.2008 at 18:16
satanov haiku kuhaj kuhaj kul haiku satanov haiku
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Posted By: Katana
Date Posted: 10.Jun.2008 at 18:20
lol to je še bolš k vici in skor bolš k anekdote
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Posted By: Buco
Date Posted: 10.Jun.2008 at 19:12
satanov haiku sploh ne gre tko kot ta tvoj ti nimaš pojma
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Posted By: grafin
Date Posted: 10.Jun.2008 at 19:37
potem pa bucek mi povej, razsvetli me kako gre zares
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Posted By: grafin
Date Posted: 10.Jun.2008 at 19:41
pisuka, ze spet nekdo potegnil vode ni, zdaj pa smrdi..
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Posted By: Buco
Date Posted: 10.Jun.2008 at 21:11
satan, car sveta tiča velkega ima kamšot u faco
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Posted By: Buco
Date Posted: 10.Jun.2008 at 21:12
to je bil haiku un taprav od satana zdej veš kakšen je
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Posted By: Banshee
Date Posted: 10.Jun.2008 at 21:59
Škoda, da ni rim, v vaših haikujih teh, zdaj igrat grem meh.
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Posted By: Buco
Date Posted: 11.Jun.2008 at 00:04
hajku ne rab rim ker rime so za pedre k nosjo ledre.
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Posted By: Norther
Date Posted: 11.Jun.2008 at 00:15
Buco raztura grafinka vse zafura cikfajt bolj rula.
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Posted By: khors
Date Posted: 11.Jun.2008 at 00:29
pjen sm matkurba, jebem ti pir pofukan, jutri muc muc muc
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Posted By: Buco
Date Posted: 11.Jun.2008 at 00:33
kakos loh pijan vse skp nč nisva spila par perov pa vin
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Posted By: Banshee
Date Posted: 11.Jun.2008 at 00:36
Buco ga žinga, Khors ga malo manj nese, leder je tr00 kvlt.
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Posted By: Buco
Date Posted: 11.Jun.2008 at 00:41
dej no mir benši kao nekej znaš hajkuje kje je pa robi?
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Posted By: MORDRED
Date Posted: 11.Jun.2008 at 11:06
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evo ti ga evo
pa gledaj s njega
Sarajevo
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Posted By: PiWi
Date Posted: 11.Jun.2008 at 12:36
pes najlepshi je machka osvajalka je teritorija
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Posted By: Šufko
Date Posted: 11.Jun.2008 at 12:48
glej kolk je ura dvanajst oseminštirideset ti si zaumret
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Posted By: grafin
Date Posted: 11.Jun.2008 at 14:31
sufko pa mordred, kaj ne znata prestevat? mora biti red!
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Posted By: grafin
Date Posted: 11.Jun.2008 at 14:33
nic se mi ne da sm se odlocila pa da grem na sprehod
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Posted By: grafin
Date Posted: 11.Jun.2008 at 14:39
Buco wrote:
satan, car sveta tiča velkega ima kamšot u faco
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tu si se zmotil satan ma le vagino ki tice pozre
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Posted By: Mrtupevc
Date Posted: 11.Jun.2008 at 14:46
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sanjam kukuruz
kogito ergo sum - res?
saj nisem svinja
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Posted By: Buco
Date Posted: 11.Jun.2008 at 14:53
ok ok nej ti bo mogoče imaš ti prav ženske satanke.
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Posted By: Šufko
Date Posted: 11.Jun.2008 at 15:09
grafin wrote:
sufko pa mordred, kaj ne znata prestevat? mora biti red!
| šte-ti znam -ola-ole ne znam pa zla-gat ola-olu kaj pa zdaj ola oli
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Posted By: Mrtupevc
Date Posted: 11.Jun.2008 at 15:21
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Ne, ne, najbrž si mislil:
"šte-ti znam o-la o-le
ne znam pa zla-gat o-la o-lu
kaj pa zdaj o-la o-li" 
Ah, ja, ni kej, šufko je v grafinove haikuje uvedel slovenski ekspresionizem (7-9-7) 
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Posted By: Banshee
Date Posted: 11.Jun.2008 at 19:57
Moji haikuji so čisto dobri, da veš, Robi je doma.
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Posted By: Mighty Hammer
Date Posted: 30.Jun.2008 at 19:08
Mi smo mogli vsak let napisat pet haikujev, pol jih je pa učitlca
pobrala in najbolše so potem poslali na natečaj (no tisti dijaki so
dobil tudi 5-ko v redovalnico ).
Kljub
temu, da so haikuji "ekstrmno" kratka pesniška oblika, znajo bit tut
prov zanimivi. Nekateri povedo več kot marsikatera daljša pesem.
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Posted By: Jan Ov Plain
Date Posted: 30.Jun.2008 at 20:24
saiysoFLAMER wrote:
Dreade zdaj končno imam, nobenemu jih ne dam, res je ni mi žal. eeeeeh
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Posted By: saiysoFLAMER
Date Posted: 30.Jun.2008 at 23:12
Dreade zdaj končno imam, nobenemu jih ne dam, res je ni mi žal. eeeeeh
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Posted By: grafin
Date Posted: 24.Sep.2009 at 12:14
makedonija, klavnica klavnic bila. a sploh kdo to ve?
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Posted By: Person-man
Date Posted: 24.Sep.2009 at 12:22
Lebdeči kruh, prinašalec ljubezni, češnjev cvet
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Posted By: Mrtupevc
Date Posted: 30.Sep.2009 at 11:04
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Sinus je en del,
glava zatrokirala,
počivancija...
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Posted By: grafin
Date Posted: 30.Sep.2009 at 14:29
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z diktaturo je
kralj res po miz' udaru
in zajebu se
(na koga se to nanasa? nagrada: kladivo)
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Posted By: Ventor
Date Posted: 13.Oct.2009 at 23:59
Neeee haikujev! Jao ku mi gre na kurac to ...
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Posted By: Ejsi_Disi
Date Posted: 14.Oct.2009 at 08:46
Poljaki nula,
naši gladko zmagajo.
Gremo na Brnik!
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Posted By: Guests
Date Posted: 18.Oct.2009 at 23:53
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posluš ti mene
cigu migu zna en vic
ki se reče štric
,
pesek hou hou laj~
~a kaj ko ni denarja
za en cigu kvdrtn
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Posted By: Guests
Date Posted: 18.Oct.2009 at 23:54
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tale zadnja je tribute to DOS
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Posted By: Mrtupevc
Date Posted: 19.Oct.2009 at 11:19
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Što voliš drek sa klorom,
herzlich willkommen,
pozdravljen v haiku klub!
O peesda, haiku zakon sem obrnil na glavo (5-7-5 ---> 7-5-7). Naj mi teta grafi oprostijo mojo jutranjo velezmoto, brisal ga pa ne bom, k se tko fajn sliš no 
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Posted By: grafin
Date Posted: 20.Oct.2009 at 16:48
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ehehehehe
vele od zdaj si zmoté
grafi oprosti
:)
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Posted By: AishaBerg
Date Posted: 24.Oct.2009 at 15:28
Haikus are easy but sometimes they dont make sense refridgerator
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Posted By: Guests
Date Posted: 31.Oct.2009 at 04:50
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