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nit za ustvarjanje haikujev.. originalno japonskih trovrsticnih besedilc, ki ujamejo trenutek..
haiku ima precej oblik.. na tej niti se gremo samo eno, bolj klasicno formo: 1 vrstica ima 5 zlogov 2 vrstica 7 in 3 vrstica spet 5 zlogov. ni sploh nujno, da se rima.. to je moj drugi haiku v lajfu: na rdeckast vecer, zogobrc ustvarja nemir, sama grem na pir. |
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drek je v skretu
smrdi po crkovini - potegnem vodo. |
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Paranoid zgaga,
čikfajt je bedarija, haiku pa zmaga. |
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Rockers of the underground, black and heavy is our sound! (Running Wild)
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hajkuji so bolj brezvezna iznajdba kot praskalo
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Posted: 09.Jun.2008 at 21:18 |
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Tristo kosmatih
morje hik hik morje hik pejmo na morje |
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Posted: 09.Jun.2008 at 21:19 |
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fabo je peder
rudl nima rok pa nog buco to sem jaz. |
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nič pametnega
mi ne pade na pamet buco je gay ja |
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... Each morning when I awake, I experience again a supreme pleasure - that of being Hopsy ...
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pozna je ura
ko pijem vino rdeče postla me čaka |
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Ne bi rad biu preveč pametn, sam men se zdi da je tale tvoj haiku bl 6-8-5 varianta, ali pač?
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Raul artista, siempre Madridista!
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žejen pir bi piu,
žejen žejen žejen sm, žejn še vedno |
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delno mas prav.. :)
skupaj nama bo uspelo.. :)
nar-dec-kast-ve-cer (5)
zo-go-brc-us-tva-rja-ne-mir (8)
sa-ma-grem-na-pir (5)
ajde spreminjam..
na rdeckast vecer,
zogobrc dviga nemir, sama grem na pir. :)
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toplo je in tko
vse zeleno she prevech me ni zaznat sploh |
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singonij je lep
splezal skoraj do stropa
posekal ga - konc
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Ole - OleOleOle;
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moj anus lebdi
kokain zelo diši fukam babice Aja, če si naredim malo reklame. V topicu moji stripi sem uploadal en strip, katerega druga polovica je celotna v haikujih. Imenuje se Življenjski ciklus faznbriferja ^^ |
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lalalalala
lalalalalalala lalalalala |
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ti si pa ne izviren, kr si vse zloge dal iste! 
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ne pa ne, ti si
tle si neki pametn raj mi dej en per. |
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satanov haiku
kuhaj kuhaj kul haiku satanov haiku |
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lol to je še bolš k vici in skor bolš k anekdote
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satanov haiku
sploh ne gre tko kot ta tvoj ti nimaš pojma |
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potem pa bucek
mi povej, razsvetli me kako gre zares |
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pisuka, ze spet
nekdo potegnil vode ni, zdaj pa smrdi.. |
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satan, car sveta
tiča velkega ima kamšot u faco |
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to je bil haiku
un taprav od satana zdej veš kakšen je |
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Škoda, da ni rim,
v vaših haikujih teh, zdaj igrat grem meh. |
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hajku ne rab rim
ker rime so za pedre k nosjo ledre. |
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Buco raztura
grafinka vse zafura cikfajt bolj rula. Edited by Norther - 11.Jun.2008 at 00:20 |
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pjen sm matkurba,
jebem ti pir pofukan, jutri muc muc muc |
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kakos loh pijan
vse skp nč nisva spila par perov pa vin |
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Buco ga žinga,
Khors ga malo manj nese, leder je tr00 kvlt. |
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dej no mir benši
kao nekej znaš hajkuje kje je pa robi? |
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evo ti ga evo
pa gledaj s njega
Sarajevo
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I KILL.....you die....I EAT...!!!
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pes najlepshi je
machka osvajalka je teritorija |
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glej kolk je ura
dvanajst oseminštirideset ti si zaumret |
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Za letenje ne rabiš kril !!!
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sufko pa mordred,
kaj ne znata prestevat? mora biti red! Edited by grafin - 11.Jun.2008 at 14:32 |
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nic se mi ne da
sm se odlocila pa da grem na sprehod |
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tu si se zmotil satan ma le vagino ki tice pozre |
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sanjam kukuruz
kogito ergo sum - res?
saj nisem svinja
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ok ok nej ti bo
mogoče imaš ti prav ženske satanke. |
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ne znam pa zla-gat ola-olu kaj pa zdaj ola oli |
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Ne, ne, najbrž si mislil: "šte-ti znam o-la o-le
ne znam pa zla-gat o-la o-lu
kaj pa zdaj o-la o-li"
 Ah, ja, ni kej, šufko je v grafinove haikuje uvedel slovenski ekspresionizem (7-9-7)  Edited by Mrtupevc - 11.Jun.2008 at 15:22 |
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Moji haikuji
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Mi smo mogli vsak let napisat pet haikujev, pol jih je pa učitlca
pobrala in najbolše so potem poslali na natečaj (no tisti dijaki so
dobil tudi 5-ko v redovalnico
 ).Kljub temu, da so haikuji "ekstrmno" kratka pesniška oblika, znajo bit tut prov zanimivi. Nekateri povedo več kot marsikatera daljša pesem. |
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Dreade zdaj končno imam,
nobenemu jih ne dam, res je ni mi žal.  eeeeeh |
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makedonija,
klavnica klavnic bila. a sploh kdo to ve? |
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Lebdeči kruh,
prinašalec ljubezni, češnjev cvet |
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Sinus je en del,
glava zatrokirala,
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z diktaturo je
kralj res po miz' udaru
in zajebu se
(na koga se to nanasa? nagrada: kladivo)
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